You watch me day in day out,
I'm apparantly too quiet by far,
But you see I don't want to yell at you,
And end up leaving a scar.

In your eyes, I'm all the world,
In the mirror thats not what I see,
If you could see the world as I do,
Then what would you think of me?

I turn around and cause you pain,
I speak and make you cry
I don't want to hurt you,
Would you be better if I died?

I want to fix the breaks,
Make the whole world right again,
But these ideas in my head wont help you,
And I think I'm going insane.

I tear out my hair ,
Cos I don't know what to do,
I don't want to be like this,
Cos if I am then I will lose you,

Help me mum I need you,
Tell me what to do,
I feel like a little kid again,
I'm feeling really blue.

Theres no 'bright side' to look at,
Cos I failed you really bad,
I hope I can apologise,
Before this drives me mad.

I want to say I'm sorry,
I'm sorry I make you cry,
I love you dearly mum I do,
I don't know how to fix this but I promise I will try.

I really liked this.

I am not generally good at leaving specific critiquing comments, but as a whole. I thought it was very good.

~Farshief

wow shadow belief..this is really good.

I really can relate to this. Its a good piece of work..You can feel the emotions there

good job.

Yes, that is definitely part of what makes it good. It's got a good deal of stuff that I think a lot of people can relate to.

My empathy is a bit fizzled right now as there are a lot of emotions flying around in my house by my parents. So I can't comment on the emotional front.

~Farshief

I think if your mum ever read this she would be very proud of you.
This poem might make her cry but they would be good tears I think.

Lovely work Shadow. Well done.

Aww that's beautiful.